the growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in town and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #town #cities

There are many advancements in commerce due to which way of shopping is changing dramatically.

Although

preference for online shoppings has increased yet most of the people do shopping from

local stock Market

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the local stock market

the local stock Market

This

is because

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I disagree with the view that shops in cities can totally closed

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this

essay views to support my disagreement will be examined

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The major cause for shopping from shops is that people do not want to buy things before checking them

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they do not believe on

online website

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an online website

that the stuff or material would be top or what they have seen on screen

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it would be similar like that

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Secondly

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sometimes they need things at

particular time

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a particular time

particular times

the particular time

and delivery from online shopping can be

late

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later

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Meanwhile

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people can purchase anything in a short time from

shop

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the shop

a shop

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Addition to

this

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something are too small which is purchased from local shops with reasonable price and necessity of those things can be satisfied

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with

the dot.

In other words

, some areas are deprived from

network area

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the network area

a network area

in that

conditions

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condition's

presence of local stores

in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go

and

shops in

near

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the nearest

cities are helpful to fulfil their needs. Not only

this

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for online Shopping they have

alot

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a lot

burdon

an onerous or difficult concern

burden

on their mind for payments as they have no links with banks

for

example credit

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example, credit

card or other way of online payments

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they feel difficult

it especially

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it, especially

poor section

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the poor section

poor sections

of society as they have limited amount of money and they have

lack

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a lack

of knowledge about it.

Eventhough

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Even though

richer ones do online shopping for everything

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however local

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however, local

shops provide services for

eversection

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the ever section

ever section

of society

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and

needs

these are convenient to return

deffected

beaten or overcome; not victorious

defeated

defected

purchasings

the act of buying

purchasing

Thus

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it plays a crucial role in life and make opportunity for people to find jobs in commerce sector

in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go

and

open their small scale business by themselves

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In conclusion

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in my opinion

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I would say everything has own importance and online shopping

can not

cannot

take place of shops in cities which are for both sections of society and

to door to

complish

put in effect

accomplish

needs

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the needs

of things in a short time.

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the growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in town and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

what kind of books do you like? what is your favourite book? what is it about? when did you get it? why do you like it?

In some countries, fast food restaurants and supermarkets give money to schools to promote their products.Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of the society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that an armed police force would cause a high level of violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?