the growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in town and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

There are many advancements in commerce due to which way of shopping is changing dramatically.
Although
preference for online shoppings has increased yet most of the people do shopping from
local stock Market
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the local stock market
the local stock Market
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This
is because
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I disagree with the view that shops in cities can totally closed
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this
essay views to support my disagreement will be examined
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The major cause for shopping from shops is that people do not want to buy things before checking them
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they do not believe on
online website
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an online website
that the stuff or material would be top or what they have seen on screen
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it would be similar like that
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Secondly
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sometimes they need things at
particular time
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a particular time
particular times
the particular time
and delivery from online shopping can be
late
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later
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Meanwhile
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people can purchase anything in a short time from
shop
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the shop
a shop
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Addition to
this
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something are too small which is purchased from local shops with reasonable price and necessity of those things can be satisfied
on
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with
the dot.
In other words
, some areas are deprived from
network area
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the network area
a network area
in that
conditions
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condition's
presence of local stores
nd
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
shops in
near
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the nearest
cities are helpful to fulfil their needs. Not only
this
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for online Shopping they have
alot
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a lot
of
burdon
an onerous or difficult concern
burden
on their mind for payments as they have no links with banks
for
example credit
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example, credit
card or other way of online payments
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they feel difficult
it especially
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it, especially
poor section
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the poor section
poor sections
of society as they have limited amount of money and they have
lack
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a lack
of knowledge about it.
Eventhough
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Even though
richer ones do online shopping for everything
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however local
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however, local
shops provide services for
eversection
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the ever section
ever section
of society
nd
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ND
and
needs
these are convenient to return
deffected
beaten or overcome; not victorious
defeated
defected
purchasings
the act of buying
purchasing
.
Thus
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it plays a crucial role in life and make opportunity for people to find jobs in commerce sector
nd
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
open their small scale business by themselves
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In conclusion
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in my opinion
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I would say everything has own importance and online shopping
can not
can not
cannot
take place of shops in cities which are for both sections of society and
next
to door to
complish
put in effect
accomplish
needs
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the needs
of things in a short time.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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