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The maps show the changes of a community center 10 years ago and until the present

The maps show the changes of a community center 10 years ago and until the present
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The given diagrams highlight the transformation of a public
center
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 over the past 10 years.
Overall
, as can be seen from the maps, the period has witnessed dramatic changes in order to meet citizen's
need
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 when going to the community
center
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. Over
the
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period
time
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, the entrance is still located in the southwest of
this
 place. To the west of
this
center
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, the garden was demolished to make way for
the
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indoor sports,
whereas
 the parking still remained. In the centre of
this
 community
center
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, the
100 seat
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 hall shows no change over
the
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time
while
 the toilet was added to the storage in the north of the hall. On the right-hand side, there were four offices, but now these offices were relocated to the bottom of the hall in order to make a room in the cafe area. In the southeast, the kitchen was kept intact.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words center with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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