When he was nearly thirteen, my brother Jem got his arm badly broken at the elbow

When he was nearly thirteen, my brother Jem got his arm badly broken at the
elbow
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Elbow
. When it healed, and Jem’s fears of never being able to play football were
assuaged
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Assuaged
, he was seldom self-conscious about his injury. His left arm was
somewhat
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Somewhat
shorter than his right; when he stood or walked, the back of his hand
was
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Was
at right angles to his body, his thumb parallel to his thigh. He couldn’t have
cared
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Cared
less, so long as he could pass and punt. When enough years had gone by to enable us to look back on them, we
sometimes
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Sometimes
discussed the events leading to his accident. I maintain that the Ewells
started
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Started
it all, but Jem, who was four years my senior, said it started long before
that
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That
. He said it began the summer Dill came to us, when Dill
first
gave us the idea
of
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Of
making Boo Radley come out. I said if he wanted to take a broad view of the thing, it really began with Andrew Jackson. If General Jackson hadn’t run the Creeks up the creek, Simon Finch
would
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Would
never have paddled up the Alabama, and where would we be if he hadn’t?

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