Many offenders commit more crimes after serving their first punishment. Why is this happening and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem

It is commonly said that
,
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,
especially in these days the majority of inmates are leaving prisons only to
reoffend
cause to feel resentment or indignation
offend
.
This
is mainly due to the lack of rehabilitation during the period of sentencing and difficulty finding permanent employment once released. There I will discuss both reasons and relevant solutions by justifying them with some ideas.
First
and foremost the thing that should not be overlooked anyway is that, many prisoners are often just left in their jails once the trail has been closed. As a
consequence they
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consequence, they
have disappointingly low chances of receiving enough moral treatment. Adding to
this
, as a large number of petty criminals are made to rub shoulders with more serious offenders like murderers and rapists giving them more opportunities to increase their criminal intentions. The solution is for the government to elect more psychologists to treat prisoners in moral ways in order to discourage them from repeating offends. A
second
issue is the challenge of finding full or
pary
something determined in relation to something that includes it
part
-time job once inmates
are returned
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is returned
back to their normal
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
life
levels
.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
are
lkely
has a good chance of being the case or of coming about
likely
to
reoffend
with the aim of making plenty of money to live on.In order to address
this
problem
,
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,
governmental forces and personal organisations should offer an appropriate employment to allow former criminals to earn a living. To sum up, having
training
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trained
in prison and
also
proffering a permanent job are effective in dealing with
this
issue. If governments implemented these solutions,
reoffending
figures would soon drop.
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