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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.
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The pie charts illustrate the differences
among
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 the payment yearly
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a
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detail the UK school in 1981, 1992 and 2001.
Overall
, the most amount of money
paid
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 for teachers'
salaries
;
in contrast
, the cost of
insurance
 was the lowest over
periods
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 given diagram. In 1981, the proportion of teachers’
salaries
 was the highest at 40%, following that other workers’
salaries
 were 28%, and the lowest cost was
insurance
to
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 2%.
Additionally
, the percentage of facilities and resources
were
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 the same at 15%. The highest percentage of teachers’
salaries
were
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 50% in 1991, compared to 22% of other
worker’s
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workers’
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salaries
 and 20% of resources. During the same time, the proportion of furniture and
insurance
were
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 5% and 3%, respectively. By 2001, The proportion of teachers’
salaries
 was 45%,
while
 the figure for facilities and other workers’
salaries
 were 23% and 15%, respectively. At the same time, the percentage of resources and
insurance
were
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 about
the
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close, with facilities higher than
insurance
 was 1%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries, insurance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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