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the chart below shows the aid form six developed countries to developing countries feom 2008-2010

the chart below shows the aid form six developed countries to developing countries feom 2008-2010
#aid #form #six #countries #feom
The bar graph provides information about six developed countries
supplied
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that supplied
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 aid to developing
nation
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nations
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 between 2008 and 2010.
Unit
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The unit
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 measured in billions of dollars.
Overall
,
US
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the US
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 contributed the highest amount of
fund
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funds
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 in
developing
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development
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However
, the aid of most countries fluctuated
in
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over
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 three years. Germany was only
constant
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constantly
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followed
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following
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upward
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an upward
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 trend. It can be clearly observed that over the 20
billion
 money
w2as
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was
 given by the US in 2008.It
was
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apply
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slightly decreased
exactly
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by exactly
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 20
billion
 in 2009.It increased to
maximum
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a maximum
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 amount
25
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of 25
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billion
 in 2010in contrast,the least proportion of
money
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the money
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 was given by
Netherland
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Netherlands
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 and Sweden, which
was
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apply
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almost
similarly
 fluctuated(just less
then
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than
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 $10
billion
) in all given
year
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years
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. 10
billion
 money was helping Germany in 2008 it continually wants up $14 to $15
billion
 and
reach
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reached
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second
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the second
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 highest in 2010.
however
,
UK
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the UK
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 stood
significant
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a significant
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 amount
12
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of 12
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billion
 dollars, which was as same as japan in 2008 UK plummeted to approximately $10
billion
 in 2009
likewise
japan
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Japan
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 declined to exactly $10
billion
.
Moreover
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,Moreover
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 UK and japan rose to
12billion
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12 billion
 and 11
billion
dollar
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dollars
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respectively
respectivly
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respectively

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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