WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The following two pie charts show the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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A glance at the two pie charts provided reveals the relative
popularity
of various leisure
activities
among European adults in 1985 and 1995.
Of these activities
, watching TV was the most widely enjoyed in both years, at 32 percent
in
1985 and a slightly lower 30 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
in 1995. Yet, by far the most significant change to take
place during Change the spelling
per cent
this
period was the increased popularity
of computer games. Not a single
respondent to the survey rated playing computer games as their preferred leisure activity in
1985. However
, by 1995 this
figure stood at 27 percent
– the Change the spelling
per cent
second
highest overall
. Also
more popular in 1995 was talking with friends, at 26 percent
compared to 21 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
a
decade earlier.
In stark contrast, Change the spelling
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however
, all other activities
decreased in popularity
. Eating out – which
was the second
most widely enjoyed pastime in 1985, accounting Correct your spelling
for
fot
23 Correct your spelling
for
percent
of
respondents – slipped to a mere 8 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
in 1995. Change the spelling
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Likewise
, there were also
considerable
decreases in the popularity
ratings of talking with family, other activities
and (as previously
mentioned) watching television.Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
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