WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The following two pie charts show the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task

The following two pie charts show the results of a survey into the popularity of various 

leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make 

comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
A glance at the two pie charts provided reveals the relative
popularity
of various leisure
activities
among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Of these
activities
, watching TV was the most widely enjoyed in both years, at 32
percent
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in 1985 and a slightly lower 30
percent
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in 1995. Yet, by far the most significant change to take place during
this
period was the increased
popularity
of computer games. Not a single respondent to the survey rated playing computer games as their preferred leisure activity in 1985.
However
, by 1995
this
figure stood at 27
percent
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– the
second
highest
overall
.
Also
more popular in 1995 was talking with friends, at 26
percent
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compared to 21
percent
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a decade earlier. In stark contrast,
however
, all other
activities
decreased in
popularity
. Eating out – which was the
second
most widely enjoyed pastime in 1985, accounting
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for
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for
23
percent
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of respondents – slipped to a mere 8
percent
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in 1995.
Likewise
, there were
also
considerable decreases in the
popularity
ratings of talking with family, other
activities
and (as previously mentioned) watching television.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words popularity, activities, percent with synonyms.
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