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The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs depict the trends of how much
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petrol
, eatables and
good
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goods
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 are produced by one nation and transmitted to the other nation between the period 2000 and 2005.
Overall
, it can be clearly vivid that the total value of
petrol
 fall in the year 2002 as compared
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 previous span, but over the period 2002 the entire rate of fuel increased rapidly over
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time. Meanwhile, the worth of material has fallen slightly.
Whereas
, the export of food has fluctuated considerably. In the cycle of 2000, the total rate of fossil fuel exported to other nations was 3, 00,000 and it is falling slightly from 50,000 in
the
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2002 time, but after twelve months the
amount
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 of total exports of
petrol
 rise dramatically and reached
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the
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nearly
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 price of 4, 50,000 in the year 2005.
On the other hand
, there was a decline
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 fuel in every period starting from nearly 50,000 to 30,000 in just 365 days and slowly it is felled down to 20,000 in 2005. Coming to the meal exported, there is a variation in the amount of food exported every year compared to the
petrol
 exports. In 2000, roughly fifteen million cuisines are exported and in 2001 and 2002 it
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increased by ten thousand
while
 in 2003 it
was
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decreased to 20000 million and from 2003 the cost of eatables exported increased slightly.
Similarly
,
also
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 of goods produced is going under fluctuation compared to
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meat and less profit
of
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 the good is exported over
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time
contrast
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 to crude oil and foodstuff. In the era of 2000, 2004 and 2005 roughly only 3000 goods were exported and from 2001 to 2003 there is
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slightly
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 fluctuation.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words petrol with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 4 times.
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