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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals, of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals, of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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The provided pie charts illustrate datum of the average percentages in typical meals of the three types of nutrients all of which are likely eaten too much based on
sodium
, saturated fat and added sugars consumed in the USA.
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, undoubtedly I can say that
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sodium
 and saturated fat occupied the highest position
is
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 dinner
as well as
 in added sugar section is
snack
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.
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 side, breakfast is the lowest sector in all of the parts without
sodium
that
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snack
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.
TO
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 start with, multifarious typical meals consumed in the USA. Fast of all,
in
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the
sodium
 hitting a low point are
snack
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 and breakfast these rates are individually 14%
percent
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. After that, lunch
as well as
at the end
 of dinners is
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 top one figure.
This
rate
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 both
are
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29% and 43%. The Saturated fat ratio is a bit higher compared to
the
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sodium
. In saturated fat
snack
 and
breakfast’s
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 rates
are
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rise a little more slowly and the
second
 part dinner and lunch going into downward rather than
sodium
.
Finally
 added sugar all of the sectors’
ratio
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 are completely changed compared to
above-sited
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others
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sectors. End of
research
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 those
sectors
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 percentages are 21%, 16%, 26%, and 37% in
snack
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, breakfast, lunch and dinner.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, snack with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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