The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
The pie charts compare the proportions of
water
consumed for three different purposes in six regions across the globe.
It is clear that
a vast majority of
water
is utilised for agriculture in South America, Africa, Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
,
whereas
North Americans and Europeans use their largest amount of
water
for industrial
purpose
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.
To begin
with, more than 80% of the
water
in Africa, Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
goes to
agricultural
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sector.
Similarly
, South Americans consume a large proportion of
water
for the same
purpose
, at 71%.
While
industrial
water
consumption in South East
Asia
accounts for 12% of total
water
usage, the figure for Central
Asia
is merely 5%. Interestingly enough, these two regions use the same percentage of
water
for
domestic
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purpose
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(7%).
In addition
, more
water
is consumed for household
function
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in South America than in Africa, which
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19% and 9% respectively. With regard to North America and Europe, about half of
water
consumption is for
industrial
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division.
While
North Americans use 39% of the
water
for agriculture, Europeans consume less amount of
water
for the same
purpose
, at 32%. For
domestic
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sector, we can see that both regions utilise the smallest percentage of
water
.
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