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The line chart illustrated the sale of five different fruit jams ( strawberry, raspberry, grape, cherry, and plum) in one nation during the period from 2009 to 2014.

The line chart illustrated the sale of five different fruit jams ( strawberry, raspberry, grape, cherry, and plum) in one nation during the period from 2009 to 2014.
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The line chart illustrated the
sale
 of five different
fruit
jams
 (
strawberry
, raspberry, grape, cherry, and
plum
) in one nation during the
period
 from 2009 to 2014. As
it
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can be seen
that
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from the chart, among five kinds of
fruit
jams
, except the
sale
 of
plum
 jam, the
sale
 of four
fruit
jams
 presented
a
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an
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 upward trend during the
period
. The
sale
 of
strawberry
 jam was the highest
one
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among the five types of
fruit
jams
. It increased from about 3.2
million
units
 in 2009 to 7
million
units
 in 2014 with only
slight
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a slight
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 fluctuation through the
period
. The
sale
 of grape
jams
 constantly increased without any zig-zag pattern which was only 0.5
million
units
 in 2009, the lowest
sale
 of the year and increased to 4.5%
million
 in 2014, jumping to the
third
 place of the year. The
sale
 of raspberry and cherry
jams
 both presented zig-zag
pattern
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patterns
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 individually. The
sale
 of the former was about 2.8
million
units
 in 2019 with only about
increase
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an increase
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 of 1.5
million
units
 during the
period
 and remained the
second
 highest
sale
 during the
period
 except in 2012 when it passed the
sale
 of
strawberry
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strawberries
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 briefly. The
sale
 of the latter one was close to 2
million
units
 in 2009, peaked
at
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in
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 2012 with
the
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sale
 of 3.2
million
unit
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units
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 and
then
 dropped to just below 3
million
units
at the end
 of the
period
 which remained in the fourth spot like in 2009. The
sale
 of
plum
jams
 decreased gradually through the 5 years from about 2.8
million
units
, the
third
 place in 2009 and dropped to close to 0
sale
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sales
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 in 2004.
Overall
,
strawberry
jams
 were the most popular among customers and
plum
jams
 tended to lose
its
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their
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 customers gradually.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "third".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sale, fruit, jams, strawberry, plum, period, million, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrated" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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