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The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of
people
 who hold a
science
 qualification in
Singapore
 and
Malaysia
. A prominent feature is that a significantly lower ratio of
people
 holds
science
 qualifications,
that is
 Master’s and Bachelor’s degrees in
science
 from
university level
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 studies in both countries. Less than 5% of
people
 hold a skill in
science
 at a Master’s degree matched in both
Singapore
 and
Malaysia
. There is a significant difference in the proportion of
people
 holding
science
 qualifications at
Bachelor
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the Bachelor
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 level between the two countries;
while
this
 number is 20% in
Singapore
, in
Malaysia
 it is a mere 10%. The rate of
people
 with school leaving exams in discipline is slightly higher in
Malaysia
 than in
Singapore
. 35% of
people
 in
Malaysia
 have a
science
 qualification at
this
 level,
whereas
 the number in
Singapore
 is 5% lower.
Finally
, more than half the
people
 in both countries hold no
science
 qualification at all.
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