The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries
The given tables provide
sales
information on
coffee
and
bananas
which had Fairtrade labels attached to them and
coffee
and
bananas
had been sold in five different European
countries
over 5
years
,
1990
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from 1990
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to 2004. The
sales
price is given in millions of
Euros
and the fair trade
coffee
and
bananas
indicate that the farmers who produced these products are from developing
countries
and have been paid a decent price for their production.
Overall
,
UK
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the UK
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was the largest
market
in
faritrade
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fairtrade
fair trade
labelled
coffee
,
while
Switzerland
was the biggest
market
of
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for
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bananas
. As the table data demonstrates
Switzerland
was the largest
market
of
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for
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coffee
in 1999 which was around 3
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million
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millions
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million
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of
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euros
even though in 2004
UK
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the UK
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was 20
million
of
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euros
in
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on
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coffee
while
in
Switzerland
was around 6
million
of
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euros
. Belgium and Sweden had the same pattern of
coffee
over 5
years
,
1million
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1 million
of
euros
increased to 1.7
million
of
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euros
,
0.8
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and 0.8
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million
of
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euros
went up to 1
million
of
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euros
respectively.
Although
Denmark becomes double in 2004 which
was
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started at 1.8
million
of
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euros
.
According to the
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The
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table clearly say that
sales
of
coffee
have
been
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increased in five
countries
over both 2
years
. For
the
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banana
sale
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,sale
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Switzerland
was the largest sale
market
in both
years
also
sales
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the sales
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amount of
banana
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bananas
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was higher than
sales
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the sales
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amount of
coffee
. In
Belgium
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,Belgium
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the
sales
amount was increased in 2004 which
were
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was
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started at 0.6
million
of
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euros
. Other
countries
, Sweden, Denmark even UK
were
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decreased
the
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sale in 2004.
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