The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The given tables provide
sales
information on
coffee
and
bananas
which had
Fairtrade
labels attached to them and had been sold in five different
countries
in Europe in 1999 and 2004. The
sales
price
are
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given in millions of Euros and the
fairtrade
coffee
and
bananas
indicate that the farmers who produced these products are from developing
countries
and have been paid a decent price for their production. As a general trend, the
UK
was the largest market for
Fairtrade labelled
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coffee
while
Swiss people preferred
bananas
of
this
category in 2004. As the table data demonstrates, the market for
Fairtrade
labelled
coffee
and
bananas
witnessed a dramatic increase in 2004 than that
of
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5 years ago. With regards to
coffee
sales
, the highest amount of
sales
could be observed in Switzerland in 1999 with exactly 3
million
Euro sale volume. The sale in the
UK
in
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this
year was half of that and the lowest sale was recorded in Sweden with less than 1
million
Euro. After 5 years, the
sales
of
coffee
in these
countries
increases
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with a remarkable improvement in the
UK
. The
sales
went up to 20
million
Euros in the
UK
in 2004
with
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was almost double
than
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the combined
sales
amount in the remaining four
countries
. For
the
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banana
sales
, Switzerland was the largest market in both years.
Sales
amount in the rest of the
countries
summed to just over 4
million
while
it was 15
million
alone in Switzerland. The
sales
upsurged significantly and went up to 47
million
while
it decreased in Denmark.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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