the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world

the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of
water
used in different ways in six areas. In
Europe
, they use 53% of their
water
in their industries,
as well as
North
America
, with 48% of
water
is
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industrially used.
On the other hand
, industrial
water
in central
Asia
is scarcely consumed, with only 5% of the
water
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used in
this
field.
Africa
consumed 7% of the
water
in industries, followed by South
America
with 10% and 12% of South East
Asia
Industrial
water
. As
to
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be seen in the pie charts, the proportion of domestic use of
water
in central
Asia
and South East
Asia
stands at 7%.
In contrast
,
Africa
uses an amount of
water
slightly more than those two areas by 2%. In North
America
and
Europe
, they have almost the same statistic
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domestic
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disproportion of 2%. South
America
domestically spent 19% of the
water
. Agricultural
water
in North
America
and
Europe
is
poorly
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. Opposite to the four other places (Central
Asia
,
Africa
, South East
Asia
and South
America
)
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most of their
water
goes to Agriculture.
Overall
, it is noticeable that Agricultural
water
in six areas is spent the most. Industrial
water
used
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the most in North
America
and
Europe
.
Africa
used the least
of
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domestic
water
.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, europe, america, asia, africa with synonyms.
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