The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
The tables compare the
sales
data of
Fairtrade
-labelled
coffee
and
bananas
between 1999 and 2004 in five countries, namely, the
UK
,
Switzerland
, Denmark,
Belgium
,
Sweden
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.
It is clear that
the
sales
of
Fairtrade
-labelled
coffee
rose in all five European countries from
from
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1999 to 2004 but
Fairtrade
-labelled
bananas
saw an increase in three out of five nations.
Overall
, the
UK
experienced by far the highest levels of spending on
two
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products. In 1990,
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both
sales
figures for
Fairtrade
-labelled
coffee
in
Switzerland
had the highest revenue at 3
million
of
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euros
,
while
Sweden
stood
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lowest
sales
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0.8
million
of
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euros
in the same
year
.
Also
,
Switzerland
received the highest
sales
in
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Faritrade-labelled
bananas
by 15
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of
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euros
,
whereas
Belgium
reached the lowest revenue at 0.6
million
of
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euros
. By 2004,
sales
of
Fairtrade
-labelled
coffee
had risen to 20
million
of
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euros
and
this
was three times higher than
Switzerland
's
sales
figure for
Fairtrade
coffee
in that
year
. The
year
2004
also
saw a dramatic increase in the money spent on
Fairtrade
bananas
in the
UK
and
Switzerland
with revenues rising by 32
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of
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euros
and 4.5
million
of
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euros
respectively.
Sales
of both products were far lower in
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Denmark,
Belgium
and
Sweden
in 2004. There is a small decline in the
sales
of
Fairtrade
coffee
but the revenue remained
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million
of
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euros
and below in that
year
.
However
, the
sales
figure for
Fairtrade
bananas
in
Belgium
had grown considerably over six years,
while
Sweden
and Denmark saw a decrease.
Finally
, It is noticeable that the
UK
and
Switzerland
had the highest demand
on
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two
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products.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, bananas, uk, switzerland, belgium, sweden, million, euros, year, fairtrade with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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