The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
The tables compare the
sales
data of Fairtrade
-labelled coffee
and bananas
between 1999 and 2004 in five countries, namely, the UK
, Switzerland
, Denmark, Belgium
, Sweden
.
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and Sweden
It is clear that
the sales
of Fairtrade
-labelled coffee
rose in all five European countries from from
1999 to 2004 but Remove the redundancy
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Fairtrade
-labelled bananas
saw an increase in three out of five nations. Overall
, the UK
experienced by far the highest levels of spending on two
products.
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sales
figures for Fairtrade
-labelled coffee
in Switzerland
had the highest revenue at 3 million
of
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euros
, while
Sweden
stood the
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sales
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at
million
of
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euros
in the same year
. Also
, Switzerland
received the highest sales
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of
bananas
by 15 millions
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million
of
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euros
, whereas
Belgium
reached the lowest revenue at 0.6 million
of
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euros
.
By 2004, sales
of Fairtrade
-labelled coffee
had risen to 20 million
of
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euros
and this
was three times higher than Switzerland
's sales
figure for Fairtrade
coffee
in that year
. The year
2004 also
saw a dramatic increase in the money spent on Fairtrade
bananas
in the UK
and Switzerland
with revenues rising by 32 millions
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million
of
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euros
and 4.5 million
of
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euros
respectively.
Sales
of both products were far lower in the
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Belgium
and Sweden
in 2004. There is a small decline in the sales
of Fairtrade
coffee
but the revenue remained 2
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at 2
million
of
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euros
and below in that year
. However
, the sales
figure for Fairtrade
bananas
in Belgium
had grown considerably over six years, while
Sweden
and Denmark saw a decrease. Finally
, It is noticeable that the UK
and Switzerland
had the highest demand on
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two
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