Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?

There have alway
been
at all times; all the time and on every occasion
always
different in type
of m
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the type
en and women
care
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woman's
er. in th
e
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In
past, Women generally relate to the
job
that focus to service or care, while men relate to the
job
that focus to strength.
However
, in modern time
both
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times
gende
r have
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genders
been gained education equally and many jobs focus on the intel
ligent or a
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intelligence
bility which can to either man or women. In my opinion, we shoul
d encouraged
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should encourage
gender
equality in worki
ng place.
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the working place
A lot of
job
a
re
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jobs
r
emain pred
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are remaining
are remained
ominated in all-women or all-men or popular than another. Some jobs that need to use physical body, the employ would prefer the men more than woman.
For example
, a soldier that need
a st
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needs
rength to fight the antagonist,
therefore
,
therefore
men still have dominate in
this
career.
However
, it may have a few female soldi
er but not
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soldiers, but
soldiers but
popular like men. Relate to
this
job
is polic
e. Fem
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policing
ale officer can do the
job
that men can't do.
For example
, when women was harm,
the
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harmed
y may prefer to talk with policewoman than polic
eman.
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a policeman
Nevertheless
, these day,
man
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days
y
job
are d
epend on k
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is depending
depends
nowledge and major that study in university. Now, both
gende
r have
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genders
equal opportunity to go to university and
moreover
some major women attan
d than
be present at (meetings, church services, university), etc.
attend
attained
attuned
men. My career, Architect
for example
, it have
a lo
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has
t of women that smart
than
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smarter
me. As well as some major, accounting, predominated in women. If some manager want
to h
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wants
ire only men, they would miss the opportunity to have good employees.
However
, recruiting by
gender
may be obsolete and we should decide by experience and ability of candi
date more than
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a candidate more
the candidate more
outward appearance.
This
decision are r
eal
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is
ly subtle, but they are not far to reach.
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