children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However television cannot replace the book as learning tool, which is why are less well educated today. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays children are getting
poor education
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a poor education
due to the frequent habits of watching
television
. At any cost
,
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,
television
will not replace
book
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books
.
Eventhough
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Even though
television
is incorporated with various
knowledgable
highly educated; having extensive information or understanding
knowledgeable
programs its not sufficient to gain knowledge compared to
book
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the book
a book
books
.
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.
That is
why I agree to the above mentioned reasons.
watching
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Watching
television
makes the children to get rid of some physical activity to refresh their mind.
Besides
that just sitting
infront
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in front
of the
telvision
broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects
television
televisions
for long hours increases health problems, particularly the eye are getting strained due to the powerful lights and rays emitted from
television
.
Eventually many
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Eventually, many
children at
young age
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a young age
tend to wear a
spectacles
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spectacle
Many of the tv shows still contain knowledge oriented programs
,
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,
inspite
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in spite
of that children get attracted very much to
caroons
a humorous or satirical drawing published in a newspaper or magazine
cartoons
crayons
cairns
and some entertainment shows. Apart from that
,
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,
reading habits among children has decreased rapidly due to the interferences of social websites and
television
.
Eventhough
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Even though
television
has a wide variety of academic programs it will not equal treated to book. While we are watching any academic programs
in
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on
television there
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television, there
will be a chance of
lot
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lots
of distraction in between that like
advertisement
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an advertisement
advertisements
,
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,
mind changing to switch over to another channel. But when we are reading books that type of distraction should be minimized
.
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.
Children are just wasting their leisure hours by spending most of their time involving in watching
television
. By the way there may be a chance of low level performance in their studies. At the same time playing some indoor games and
chatinng
talk socially without exchanging too much information
chatting
with each other are
also
decreased rapidly due to the impact of
television
.

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