Nowadays, the older people who need employment have to compete with younger people. what problems does this cause and what are the solutions.

Economy
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The economy
is
backborn
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the backbone
backbone
a backbone
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for the country development. Nowadays, The economy is
formost
ranking above all others
foremost
reason and
also
a
needs
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need
to live for each and every person. Because, In the present scenario older people who need employment have to compete with younger people who has just
graduate
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graduated
from the universities. So, I suggest below some causes and solutions.
Firstly
, The old people compete with
younger generation
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the younger generation
to get a job
opportunities
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opportunity
. From that the interviewer
select
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selects
them because of their higher work experience is far more than the young graduates.
Therefore
, The unemployment rates are increased with a
magnificient
characterized by grandeur
magnificent
percentage.
Moreover
, Those Unemployees youth take steps to do crimes for
fullfil
put in effect
fulfil
fulfils
their needs and dreams.
Furthermore
, The young generation
is get
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is getting
has got
has gotten
gets
in depressed from
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depressed from
not having any jobs and they committed
sucides
the act of killing yourself
suicide
suicides
too. Meanwhile, Most of them are going
for
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to
the outside country to find any jobs and these will create
loss
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a loss
for our economy and our country too. To Contrast, From happened
this
causes the government should take some decisions for the profit in the
both
sides. They encourage people and give subsidies to open the plant or any business, From that our unemployment rate is decreased. Apart from
this
,
Accept space
,
They make
strong pension related scheme
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a strong pension related scheme
.
Therefore
, The senior citizen
do not worry
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does not worry
about their future and
this
will get a chance for the young generation to being an employee in
this
industry. Simultaneously, The old public mind is quite rigid and they do not connect with the latest technology as
the young
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the younger
public can do.
also
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Also
, their efficiency is low
compare
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compared
to them.
and
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And
this
will not
bothered
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bother
by any industries.
Thus
, The government open some schemes and
this
will be give
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will be given
support to
both of generations
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both generations
and for the win - win situation for
both
of them too. To conclude, I suggest that the government
play
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plays
a vital
roles
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role
for
both
the generations. I totally agree with my solutions.

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