The chart show the percentage of male and female teachers in different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010

This

graph shows the gender distribution of teacher teaching in various types of education, nursery, primary

school

, secondary

school

, college, private training institution, and university, in the UK in the year 2010. At first glance, the amount of female

teacher

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teachers

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gradually decreases when the age of the student

increasing

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increases

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It is clear that

the most popular educational institution for female

schoolteacher

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schoolteachers

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is a nursery and primary

school

which considerably account for more than 90% and male

teacher

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teachers

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at less than 10%.

While

male educators like to teach at

university

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universities

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, at approximately 70%.

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A collage

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Collage

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College

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is only

the

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place where the proportion of

Male

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males

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and

female

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females

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are equal. The others, secondary

school

and private training academy

are resembled

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resemble

have resembled

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, the former men less

then

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than

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women and vice versa. In summary, the number of male teachers

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apply

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before secondary

are

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extremely low when compare to

others institution

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other institutions

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Age

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The age

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the student

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student

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students

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might affect

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apply

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the decision of both sexes of teachers to decide where they want to teach.

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4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Mistakes

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

One main idea per paragraph

Include an introduction and conclusion

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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