Prevention is better than cure out of a country's health budget in last portion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventive measures to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

It's a true fact that if a percentage of money from health budget will be spent on providing health education and prevention rather than
more focusing on their
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focusing more on their
treatments. I defer to
this
to a large extent for some reasons. My position is argued
further
with explanations. Out of all the reasons, the foremost one is the costly treatments
nowadays which
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nowadays, which
can't be
afford
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afforded
by every individual of that country. As day by day scientists are dealing with
great number
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a great number
of diseases which requires a
lots
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lot
of fund to carry on their
reaserch
systematic investigation to establish facts
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researches
and these expenses are
compensate
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compensated
by increasing the price of treatment. So
instead
of paying hefty money, we must have a proper information regarding that and that's not only good for us but
also
the people's who are living around us.
Additionally
, If everyone
have
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has
a proper education of all the
kind
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kinds
of
diseases it
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diseases, it
may help them to be
prepare
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prepared
for the upcoming which may infect them
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.
It can be done by broadcasting a plethora of ads on
channel
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channels
the channel
such
as T.V. , billboards
,
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,
online plus much more way. From
this
large number of masses will be alert and pay attention towards it.
However
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
would not overlook the other side too.
To begin
with, medicines and treatment play's
there
of them or themselves
their
their their
own role in helping public. As in case of emergency, hospitalization is a primary thing and that time doctors know much better about it.
Also
,
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,
they became
god
benefit
good
for us at that time.
Thus
to conclude the discussion
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,
it can
be
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finally be said
finally
said that it is essential for us of having a guidance whereas hospitals are always there for us.

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