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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 200 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 200 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides information about the quality of six different kinds of
energy
 in the United States, measured by
quadrillion
units
, between 1980 and 2030.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 almost the
amount
 of
power
 that people consumed,
such
 as fuels, coal, natural
gas
, nuclear and solar/
wind
 is predicted to increase;
however
, the
consumption
 of
hydro
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hydropower
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power
 still will
steady
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 in fifty years from 1980 to 2030. In 1990, fuel was the kind of
energy
 with the highest
consumption
, on average, people used 35
quadrillion
units
;
compered
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compared
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 to
approximated
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 20
quadrillion
units
 for natural
gas
, and 16
quadrillion
energy
 for coal.
While
 the figure for nuclear, solar/
wind
 and
hydro
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hydropower
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power
were
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 about the same as 4
quadrillion
units
. From 1980 to 2015 the quality of coal and natural
gas
 jumped slowly, and both consumed around 25
quadrillion
units
. Meanwhile, petrol and oil continued to increase to 43
quadrillion
units
; the
amount
 of nuclear, solar/
wind
 and
hydro
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hydropower
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power
 consumed 6
quadrillion
units
, 5
quadrillion
units
 and 4
quadrillion
units
 respectively. Over a five-year period between 2020 to 2025, the
amount
 of natural
gas
, nuclear, solar/
wind
 and
hydro
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hydropower
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power
 will remain stable at roughly 25
quadrillion
units
, 7
quadrillion
units
, 5
quadrillion
units
 and 4
quadrillion
units
 respectively. The
consumption
 of fuel and coal will experience
upward
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 trend during the same period. Between 2025 and 2030, Petro and oil
consumption
 will rise significantly to 49
quadrillion
energy
 and it will be expected the highest figure in the line graph.
Besides
, the
amount
 of coal will climb considerably to 31
quadrillion
units
. Looking into the future, an inconsiderable increase in the
consumption
 of nuclear and solar, with a rise of over 1
quadrillion
energy
 in just five years from 2025 to 2030.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, quadrillion, units, amount, power, gas, wind, consumption, hydro with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerably" was used 2 times.
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