The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

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The graph illustrates the portion of the population between the ages of 65 and above in the USA, Sweden and Japan from 1940 to 2040.

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measured in percentage.

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, Japan had the highest and the lowest amount of people within

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age bracket with about 25% and 3% in 2040 and 1980 respectively.

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the USA and Sweden maintained a close margin in their figures, with approximately 23% for both nations in 2040. Looking closely at the data presented, America had a consistent upward trend with a sharp fall in 2020, the numbers continued to raise up until the

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, Sweden’s figures showed a close resemblance with the former, but with a continuous record of an upward movement

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1940, 1960, 1980 and 2000 there was a downward trend for

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category of people with around 3% at the lowest.

Submitted by kumrash2019 on Wed Jan 25 2023

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

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