A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter • describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team • summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts • say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you regarding your recent and amazing social responsibility campaign in the downtown district, as it has grabbed my attention. Relevantly, I believe that it is part of my responsibility as a citizen to participate in your survey and highlight why there are benefits for each of the options that you have mentioned in your advertisement.

Firstly

, I believe that sponsoring a sport that depends on

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group work is a strong statement for the youth, as it allows them to recognize the positive outcome of cooperation.

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, it improves their communication skills.

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there are many benefits of supporting local

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events. Specifically, I believe that

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is a crucial cultural element that influences and shapes our thinking, mood, and our approach towards life. As well,

music

has been part of what makes us more capable to endure our daily routine.

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me into

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, I truly believe that supporting outdoor musicals

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is a good idea to start

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your CSR campaign. Thank you. Yours Sincerely, Mohamed Hawas

Wed Oct 13 2021

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

A lot of young people do not know how to manage their money when graduating from high school. What do you think are the reasons? What can be done to teach them this important skill?

As countries develop, their populations tend to live individually or in small family units. What are the causes of this trend and what are the effects on society？

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