The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes

The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes
The given figure illustrates
about
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how
cement
is produced and
than
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how building
manufacturer
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manufacturers
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use
cement
to make
concreate
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concrete
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.
Overall
, two illustrations are given in which image one is explaining the whole
process
of
cement
production it explains clearly from top to bottom
that
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how many materials are required for
this
process
.
However
, the
second
diagram is explaining how
cement
are
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used to make concrete for building manufacturing. At first, the
cement
process
needs two main things namely limestone and clay. These can go through
from
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a crusher that makes those elements into powder form. After that, there is a machine attached which is called Mixer in which the powder mix evenly.
Third
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step of
this
process
is
Rotating
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Heater, it is like a roll which
have
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two open holes from one open space powder mixture passes and from
other
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end heat is provided which makes the mixture
in
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a
liquity
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liquidity
liquid
texture. The
last
step of
this
process
is Grinder.
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the substance coming out from heat processed and the final result coming out from Grinder is called
Cement
. The
second
figure shows, how concrete will produce after
cement
.
This
process
only contains four elements which are
cement
, water, Sand and Gravel. Gravel
are
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small stones.
This
step consists of one big concrete mixer that mixes all 4 elements and produces concrete. The main thing
of
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making
this
is to keep every element in a proper ratio which is
cement
must be at 15%, water
in
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10%, Sand and Gravel in 25% and 50%
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respectively
respectivily
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respectively

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