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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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There are changes in annual spending by a particular school in 1981, 1991 and 2001 in terms of teachers'
salaries
, insurance, furniture and equipment, resources, and other workers'
salaries
.
During
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in
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1981, teachers'
salaries
 is 40% which
increase
 in 1991
with
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 50% and decrease again in 2001
with
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 45%.
While
the
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insurance is 2% in 1981 which
increase
 in 1991
with
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to
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 3% and
increase
 dramatically in 2001 with 8%.
On the other hand
, furniture and equipment is 15% in 1981 which decreases in 1991
with
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 5% and gradually
increase
with
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 23%.
Furthermore
, the resources in books in 1981 was 15% which became 20% in 1991 and decrease in 2001
with
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 9%.
Lastly
, other workers'
salaries
 is 28% in 1981 which became 22% in 1991 and decreases in 2001
with
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 15%. In conclusion, insurance was increasing through the years
while
 the rest
are
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 decreasing.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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