The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
In
1990s
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, the world is greatly affected by 35% of over-grazing, 30% of deforestation, 28% of over-cultivation and 7% of other causes. There are three regions that are severely affected, North
America
,
Europe
, and
Oceania
. In North
America
, erosion is 0.2%, over-horticulture is 3.3%,
over-grazing
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and over-grazing
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is 1.5%, which is 5% total of land degraded. In
Europe
, erosion is 9.8%, over-grazing 5.5%,
over-horticulture
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and over-horticulture
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is 7.7%, which is 23% total of land degraded.
Lastly
, in
Oceania
, erosion is 1.7%, 0% of over-horticulture,
over-grazing
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and over-grazing
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of 11.3%, which is 13% total of land degraded. In conclusion, the highest affected deforestation is in
Europe
,
second
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is in
Oceania
and the
last
is in North
America
. The highest affected region in over-cultivation is in
Europe
again, the
second
is in North
America
while
Oceania
has none.
Lastly
, the highest affected region in over-grazing is
in
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Oceania
,
second
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is
in
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Europe
and the
last
is
in
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North
America
.

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