Some people say that when children under 18 are committing a crime they should be punished, while others believe they should be educated. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion.

There is often a dichotomy in opinion, on whether the
juveline
of or relating to or characteristic of or appropriate for children or young people
juvenile
crime
should be sentenced to punishable or putting them
in
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at
rehabilation
the restoration of someone to a useful place in society
rehabilitation
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
is the best possible solution. I strongly
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
belief
that underage criminals should be made aware about their actions rather than being punished straightaway.
To begin
with, if youngster found guilty
in
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of
any
crime
, they should be sent to
rehabs center
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a rehab centre
rehabs centre
rehab centre
rehabs Center
rehab center
. To put in
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
way, they should be taught that what would be the consequences of committing the
crime
and how much it cost the victim? To illustrate
this
, the boy of age 16 has
being
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
been
forgiven by the mother of
victim
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the victim
a victim
, who has killed his own best friend during the football game.
Although
, it was hard for the mother to forgive that
crime
, the purpose for doing so is to understand the criminal that killing is not the answer in the real world.
This
act of kindness helped him to
controll
power to direct or determine
control
the rage and anger.
Furthemore
in addition
Furthermore
, penalizing the young criminals will have the detrimental impact on the
country
. In other word, the young generations are considered to be the valuable
assest
anything of material value or usefulness that is owned by a person or company
assets
asset
of the nation. If
judicial system
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the judicial system
forgive them and sent him to
rehabilation center
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the rehabilitation centre
rehabilation centre
a rehabilitation centre
rehabilation Center
rehabilitation centres
rehabilitation centre
, they might
evolved
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evolve
as
good citizen
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good citizens
a good citizen
of the
country
which eventually helped the society to prosper.
For instance
, the scientist in the United Sates of America has found the cured of the brain cancer which is the common
diesease
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
disease
nowdays but
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nowadays, but
nowadays but
he was once arrested
for
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in
the
bulgary
a republic in the eastern part of the Balkan Peninsula in southeastern Europe
Bulgaria
case when he was only fourteen
year
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years
of age.
Instead
, of sentencing him ten
year
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years
imprisoment
putting someone in prison or in jail as lawful punishment
imprisonment
, the jury decided to send him to the
governmnet
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
school to start his education and provide him the food on
daily basis
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a daily basis
. He emerged as a scientist and eventually brought the fame to the
country
. To conclude
this
, penalizing the underage
adoloscent
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
adolescent
adolescents
is a way easy job for the jury or judicial
system but
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system, but
in my opinion the talent of the nation can only be found through
the young
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the younger
generations. Polishing and teaching them personal skills may help the
country
to bring the new innovations.

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