The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
The pie charts give information about the
water
used for industrial, agricultural, and domestic in North
America
, South
America
,
Europe
, Africa, Central
Asia
, and South East
Asia
. It is noticeable that more
water
is used by industry than by agriculture and home in North
America
and
Europe
.
By contrast
, agriculture accounts for the vast of
water
used in the rest four areas. In North
America
and
Europe
, the
water
consumption of industry
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48% and 53% of total
water
usage.
Whereas
, around 10% of
water
is used for industrial production in the rest four developing areas. The opposite data can be shown in
water
usage of
agricultural
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the agricultural
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category.
This
accounts for over 70%
in
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South
America
, Africa, Central
Asia
, and South East
Asia
,
in contrast
,
less
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than 40% of the figures in North
America
and
Europe
. Residential
water
usage accounts
of
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the least percentage
comparing
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compared
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with industrial use and agricultural use. Around 15% of
water
is used at home in
America
and
Europe
,
while
less than 10% of it is consumed in Africa, Central
Asia
, and South East
Asia
.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, europe, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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