The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.
Information about the
students
’ enrolments at Manchester University in the years 1937, 1967 and 2017
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presented in the table below. The information presented is categorised to give information about the absolute number of
students
enrolled, their gender proportions and their nationality (i.e.
students
coming from foreign countries and those coming from the UK, specifically within 40 miles of the city).
Overall
, the most conspicuous trends concern the general increase in the number of
the
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students
enrolled from 327 in 1937 to 6254 in 2017
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and the dramatic decrease in the percentage of the local
students
enrolled which made up 55% of the total number of
students
in 1937 and declined sharply to reach 1-2% in total in 2017. A surprising observation to be noted is the steadily falling proportion of female
students
enrolled between
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1937 and 1967 with the percentage of
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students’
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population coming from abroad remaining the same in those years, being 6% and 7%, respectively.
However
, the proportion of foreign
students
witnessed a remarkable increase in 2017 to constitute 32% of the total amount of
students
enrolled.
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