In some high schools, part of the curriculum requires students to participate in community work such as helping the elderly or disabled. In what way do children benefit from this? Do you think it should be part of the curriculum?

Nowadays, there has been lots of researches and studies to make some changes in high schools syllables in order to have more integration of students in community activities like paying more attention to old people or disabled
for instance
deaf and dumb individuals. Overall, as much as students take part in social activities no matter the type or
time which
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time, which
they spend, will have a positive effect on their whole life and the
society
in general. Having
more social activity
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a more social activity
, while trying to add
such
programs in high schools lessens has a wide variety of advantages for
young generation
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the young generation
in different aspects.
First
of all, students will have a sense of being an important
person
for others
as a result
of helping others and will bring a feeling of self-confidence while they have already solved the issue someone else tackled with.
Also
, a bidirectional relation will be
stablished
brought about or set up or accepted; especially long established
established
stabilized
by helping an elder or disabled
person
while it will create a huge positive feeling aiding other individuals, even if
it
it is
it's
not successful at the end between two
person
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people
persons
, an
as a result
the
society
could have a closer relation between members. Having emphasize on human being values and cultural aspect of the
society
,
furthermore
, could be one of the most important results of
such
activities that would bring a massive imagination for students that each
person
must take care of not only themselves but
also
others must always be under their attention. To be concluded with, since many personal habits and acts are based on what they have learned in their younger years and the most refer to their school studies, I opine that trying to teach younger taking part in community
activity
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activity, for
for instance
helping
old
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older
people or disabled could have
positive effect
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a positive effect
both on personal and
society
and definitely should be part of the school
programs
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program
.

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