In some areas of US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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Some cities and states of US limiting adolescences to be

outdoor

Suggestion

outdoors

after a certain time at night without

grown-ups

a fully developed person from maturity onward

grownups

This

essay disagrees with

this actions

Suggestion

this action

these actions

because

such

limitations

wiolate

fail to agree with; be in violation of; as of rules or patterns

violate

violates

violated

basic human rights and it makes teens spend their free time less healthier

then

conjunction used in comparatives

than

they could. Any kind of curfew is

violation

Suggestion

a violation

of human freedom and it should be imposed only in extraordinary cases like war or

nature

Suggestion

natural

disaster.

This

kind limitations should protect people from getting

in to

expresses motion to a point on, or within, something

into

trouble due to lack of knowledge about

dangers

Suggestion

the dangers

that are waiting for them outside their habitats. Limitations of freedom could lead to confrontation between people and government, what could be transformed in full-scale rebellion.

For example

, curfew imposed on February 2014 in Kiev transformed ordinary demonstration to revolution and

as a result

president and government

was changed

Suggestion

were changed

Health

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The health

of adolescences can have

huge negative impact

Suggestion

a huge negative impact

because of spending their free time in the evening with smartphones

instead

of having

face-to-face conversation

Suggestion

a face-to-face conversation

with friends. German

health

care government

Accept comma addition

care, government

organisation reported in 2016 that computers, smartphones and other relative gadgets can have negative

health

effects. It was reported that using gadgets

with

Suggestion

display more than four hours a day will lead to sight problems.

For instance

same

Suggestion

the same health organisation

a same health organisation

health

organisation stated that almost every

third

youngster in Germany wears glasses due to intensive using of smartphones. In conclusion, imposing of

curfew which

Accept comma addition

curfew, which

prevents teens to be out of doors at evening without adults is serious violation of human rights that could lead to civil unrest and it has

huge negative impact

Suggestion

a huge negative impact

huge negative impacts

teens

Suggestion

teens'

teen

health

Sun Jan 12 2020

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In some areas of US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

Include an introduction and conclusion

The internet will never replace traditional course books in schools. How far do you agree with this prediction?

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

Should governments make decisions about people's lifestyle, or should people make their own decisions?

Some people suggest that it is better for children to be brought up by the whole family including uncles, aunts and grandparents, rather than just the parents. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and examples.