A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter Describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team Summaries the benefits of paying for the concerts Say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Sir or Madam, The impetus behind writing

this

letter is to appreciate the efforts you are making to bring improvements to the community. To embark with, sponsoring a minor’s sports team will beget a myriad of benefits to the children

such

as promoting healthy physical activities. As nowadays, children spend less time playing outdoor sports, which affects their health and fitness levels. What is more, in the time-deprived society, people have less time for refreshing their minds. If there were more concerts, it would provide a great opportunity for people to have a break from the monotonous routine. In

this

way, they would be able to get some motivation, and relief from stress due to workload. I would suggest that the company should divide the total amount and sponsor the children’s sports team for one year, and arrange concerts for

year. As both segments of the society

that is

children, and the

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are in dire need of

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of activities, which are beneficial for their health. I hope that you will consider my suggestions and should not neglect any of them. Yours sincerely, Sara Khan

Wed Oct 13 2021

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