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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The tables
illustrates
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 information about the sale of
coffee
 and
banana
 in five
european
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European
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countries
during
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between
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 1999 and 2004. Units are measured in millions of
euros
.
Overall
, the amount of
coffee
 sold increased in 2004 as compared to 1999 for all
the
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five
countries
.
On the other hand
, the amount of
banana
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bananas
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 sold decreased in Sweden and Denmark and rose
for
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 all the other
countries
. The greatest disparity can be seen in
UK
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the UK
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where by
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 the year 2004, the
sales
 of
coffee
 increased by nearly 14 times.
Furthermore
, The
sales
 increased by 3
million
euros
 in
switzerland
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 and by 0.7
million
euros
 in Belgium. The least amount of growth is in Denmark and Sweden where
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coffee
sales
 saw a mere increment of 0.2
million
euros
 during
this
5 year
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 period. Switzerland saw the most profit in
banana
sales
 as by 2004, the
banana
sales
 grew 3 times. UK and Belgium
banana
sales
 increased by 4.5
million
euros
 and 3.4
million
euros
 respectively.
In contrast
, Sweden and Denmark were the only
countries
 where
banana
sales
 declined by nearly half.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, banana, countries, euros, sales, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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