Explain an memory that motivate you to make an important decision?

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It was the middle of June that I found Rapunzel. It was not Rapunzel, which I found after a long time, they were my dreams, that breath again. Rapunzel was my

first

barbie and

first

souvenir, which I did not choose by myself, yet it was similar to what I wanted. I was so young, around 4 or 5, and from all things that they talked about, I understood that my mother`s cousin (Ali Najafi) brings

this

gorgeous barbie from a planet that called Europe for me. I concluded that he went there to study, so everyone can go to

this

planet just by studying (actually he went there for research), and again, I assumed that where he studied was not good enough that he came back. I made a sequent conclusion and decided to go there by my dear Rapunzel so that I asked my mother to introduce a country to me on

this

planet;

consequently

, She explained a country that I could not memorize its name.

However

, I understood that there is full of various flowers with wonderful weather and somewhere new, after that I promised to Rapunzel and myself to travel there. All summer, when my mother practiced English to me and told me that I could communicate with

this

language to people from all over the world, I tried hard to learn new vocabulary as more as I can, and my childhood pasted with the songs of magic English movies. But, as I grow, Rapunzel and my dream become pale; eventually, I put Rapunzel and the dream of immigration to Europe into the box. A long-time pasted until we decided to change our house, I found that old box which brought me to around thirteen years ago, when I decided to immigrate to Netherland. A thought pops into my mind to apply for a university. I know IELTS is a long term process, and four months is a short time to get ready for IELTS which I can achieve the needed score for three skills and just one skill left;

however

, I think that I can obtain the left one too. I always strive to be my best, and my various abilities in handling different tasks could be a big help for me to participate in a challenging course. I am a good orator, and most of the people around me believe that I can be a successful lawyer due to my power to convince people;

however

, it is too hard in English.

Also

, I can solve physic, math, and chemistry problems I like to deal with complex ones and working with numbers or using the intelligent method.

Submitted by sabahashemi103 on Mon Dec 16 2019

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Explain an memory that motivate you to make an important decision?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people say that it is necessary to use animals for testing the medicines intended for human beings, others however think it is cruel and unnecessary.Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Some people consider computers to be more of a hindrance than a help. Others believe that they have greatly increased human potential. How could computers be considered a hindrance?

Children's education is expensive. In some countries, the government pays some or all of the costs. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

Some countries are handing over public services such as hospitals, railways and education to private companies to be run for commercial profit. Are governments justified in letting private profit manage the public interest?

Without capital punishments (the health penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increases. Capital punishment in essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?