Childhood obesity is an increasing problem in Australia.As many as two thirds of children are now obese. Schools have a responsibility to monitor what their students eat and the amount of exercise they do. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Increasing number of infants, approximately three quarters, is facing fat problem in Australia. Many people claim that children should be cared, observed what type of meal they have, how much they exercise regularly by schools.

the

Suggestion

The

essay will subscribe to

this

opinion slightly and put forward some other monitoring methods as to children

health

related matter. School should be liable to offsprings' daily routine

such

as, how much nutritious food they should take, when and how they should do physical exercise and the length of time they should spend on playing. Because, they are

also

a pivotal lesson of education as children spare a considerable amount of time in schools on a daily routine basis.

As a result

, children will be sturdy, strengthened and vigorous.

For instance

, In Vietnam, it is compulsory for teachers

to look

Suggestion

look

after and to be vigilant infants's modus operandi and modus

vivendi

Suggestion

Vivendi

as well as reveal a weekly report regarding their

health

. Along with teachers' accountability,

however

, parents watchfulness is a significant area concerning children foods and routine. Because, offsprings' stay more hours at home than schools.

consequently

Suggestion

Consequently

, children will have the under strict observation and discrete routine so that they can eat hygienic and fat free food which lead them to be fit, slim, and healthy.

For example

, in our family, my parents along with me are very cautious of my youngest brother's and sister's

health

. To conclude,

although

teachers' responsibility cannot gainsay about students'

health

, but the family has an indispensable liability for children

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Childhood obesity is an increasing problem in Australia.As many as two thirds of children are now obese. Schools have a responsibility to monitor what their students eat and the amount of exercise they do. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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