You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The line graph illustrates how many
enquiries
were made to a Tourist Information office in one city by phone, letter and in person
from January to June in 2011.
In January 2011, more than 800 enquiries
were received by letters or emails while
enquiries
by telephone were less than 800. In contrast
, in January, the least amount of enquiries
was received in person
, the number
of enquiries
in person
soared significantly over the next
six months
and in June, the highest number
of enquiries
was in person
accounting for more than 1800. Surprisingly, the number
of enquiries
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You should spend about 20 minutes on this
task.
The graph below shows the number
of enquiries
received by the Tourist
Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
You should write at least 150 words.
by letter and email dropped gradually over the next
two months
which was followed by a sharp decrease in next
three months
becoming the lowest in June, reducing to less than 400. The number
of enquiries
by telephone slightly slipped in February which was followed by a marginal rise in the next
couple of months
. Over the next
three months
, there was a significant increase in telephone enquiries
which rose to 1600.Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words enquiries, person, number, months with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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