You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist

Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The line graph illustrates how many
enquiries
were made to a Tourist Information office in one city by phone, letter and in
person
from January to June in 2011. In January 2011, more than 800
enquiries
were received by letters or emails
while
enquiries
by telephone were less than 800.
In contrast
, in January, the least amount of
enquiries
was received in
person
, the
number
of
enquiries
in
person
soared significantly over the
next
six
months
and in June, the highest
number
of
enquiries
was in
person
accounting for more than 1800. Surprisingly, the
number
of
enquiries
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this
task. The graph below shows the
number
of
enquiries
received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. by letter and email dropped gradually over the
next
two
months
which was followed by a sharp decrease in
next
three
months
becoming the lowest in June, reducing to less than 400. The
number
of
enquiries
by telephone slightly slipped in February which was followed by a marginal rise in the
next
couple of
months
. Over the
next
three
months
, there was a significant increase in telephone
enquiries
which rose to 1600.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words enquiries, person, number, months with synonyms.
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