Some people believe that children should spend all their free time with their families. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, it can be argued that children
to spend
Suggestion
spend
their all their free
time
with their family or with other activities. In my opinion, it would be better for children to expend their all free
time
individually or with their friends. There are several reasons for children why being with family is necessary in their spare
time
.
Firstly
, there may be young children who
does not have
Suggestion
do not have
parents in the world, unfortunately. So, children who have parents should enjoy every moment that they passed together.
Secondly
, there may be young children whose school
is located
Suggestion
are located
far away from home. So,
theyand
Suggestion
they and
their parents may miss each others.
Thirdly
, when young children do have some free
time
, they can get advice from their family members if they have problem with their studies.
On the other hand
,
firstly
, I believe that children should spend all their
time
with reading books, learning something new.
This
can be the basement of the future career and make finding a job
more easier
Suggestion
easier
after finishing the university or college.
Secondly
, if they should be encouraged to spend all their spare
time
with playing various types of games with their friends, they can enjoy their past
time
. To conclude, spending free
time
with family may be necessary for children, but expending all spare
time
may become negative. So, they should be encouraged to spend it individually or with friends.

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