Childhood obesity is an increasing problem in Australia. As many as two thirds of children are now obese. Schools have a responsibility to monitor what their students eat and the amount of exercise they do. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Children
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Child
obesity has become a cause of concern in Australia. Almost, two
third
of them are now obese.
This
essay will discuss why I completely disagree that schools should take
measure
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measures
to what their pupils eat.
Firstly
, one of the disagreements is that educational centres are for studying not for eating and exercises. Teachers are expected to teach and educate their
pulpils
a learner who is enrolled in an educational institution
pupils
puppies
pups
on new skills that will be useful when they graduate. More so, foods are cooked by the parents with following proper hygiene that will not cause health panic.
This
, will not have an effect on the body system.
For instance
, my children
wakes
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wake
up as early as 5:00am on a daily basis to have some indoor and outdoor exercises before preparing for school.
On the other hand
,
hours
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the hours
spent in school
is
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are
more than the time spent at home. Most Australian children
has become
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have become
so brilliant and intelligent that the educational body won a state award for
best ministry
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the best ministry
in the country.
For example
, my four
years
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year
old son can now read, write and speak fluently.
This
is a product of good teaching in a classroom
also
, the learning of basic technical things can be useful in future. In conclusion, it was itemized that schools are for learning different type of subjects. While, a home is for
montoring
the act of observing something (and sometimes keeping a record of it)
monitoring
mentoring
what a child eats and all
work-outs
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
workouts
workout
that is
required to be done. In my opinion, I absolutely disagree that schools should have control of a child's diet.
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