some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters such as food, clothes and entertainment is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matter that affect them. discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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it depends on the age of a child.
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For
example little children cannot use clothes and they
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free to their choices they could make mistakes so parents should not dictate children what want but guide to the path.
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parents in western world teach their children
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when they do something wrong when children are thought to their own choice could easily manage the affairs when grow up. Children may sometimes give a good opinion so that it is good to understand rather than upsetting them many parents in Africa do not believe
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cause many African children become vandals and aggressors toward the community.
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the reasons
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