The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
The first potential location (S1) is outside the town itself
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and is sited just off the main road to the town of Hindon, lying 12
kms
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km
to the
north-west
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northwest
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.
This
site is in the countryside and so would be able to accommodate a lot of car parking.
This
would make it
accessable
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accessible
to shoppers from both Hindon and Garlsdon who could travel by car. As it is
also
close to the railway line linking the who
towns
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to Cransdon (25 km to the south-east), a potentially large number of shoppers would
also
be able to travel by train.
In contrast
, the suggested location, S2, is right in the town centre, which would be good for local residents.
Theorically
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Theoretically
the store could be accessed by road or rail from the surrounding towns, including Bransdon, but as the central area is a no-traffic zone, cars would be unable to park and access would be difficult.
Overall
, neither site is appropriate for all the towns, but for customers in
Cransdon
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Cranston
, Hindon and Garlsdon, the out-of-town site (S1) would probably offer more advantages.

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