Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Free time represents the opportunity for many people to improve skills related to the mind and get better capacity by
doing
the act that results in something coming to be
making
simple games
such
as scrabbles and puzzle or by reading books.
Although
other believe that
this
period should be used to
rest
. I believe that both of
thes
plural of "this"
these
those
activities have a great effect on our mind
First
of all, intellectual games
such
as puzzle and
scrable
an aimless drawing
scrabble
help the development of new skills. By playing games people can learn without doing any effort new word, have better reflex and be more logical. They can
also
become
interest
Suggestion
interested
by science and history or
develope
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
their imagination by reading a book. According to many teacher games is considered as an
education
Suggestion
educational
form particularly
Accept comma addition
form, particularly
for young children. They are ore concentrate and interest when they play than when they have to listen teacher and learn basic knowledge.
Consequetly
Suggestion
Consequently
, a lot of primary teacher use games to
explains
Suggestion
explain
mathematics and teach new vocabulary.
Therefore
, activities can be considered as
rest particularly
Accept comma addition
rest, particularly
for children who likes to be active. I am sure that leisure and reading books is more appropriate than just watching TV.
However
, after a long
day
of working and studying many people prefer to sleep. They are several
benefit
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benefits
reliated
being connected either logically or causally or by shared characteristics
related
to
rest but
Accept comma addition
rest, but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think the most common one is to regenerate itself for the
next
day
to be more
performant
a dramatic or musical entertainment
performance
at work or school. It is
also
a good way to avoid
headach
something or someone that causes anxiety; a source of unhappiness
headache
headaches
at the end of the
day
.
For instance
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
am a post graduate student and generally after 9 hours class we have a lot of homework for the following
day
. So
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
have to study for 4 hours
addionally
in addition, by way of addition; furthermore
additionally
ordinarily
and my fist need after
this
long
day
is go
Suggestion
is going
has gone
goes
to bed and certainly not to have leisure.
thus
Suggestion
Thus
, we will use our free time for our needs
.
Accept space
.
In
conslusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
free time is the opportunity to do activities and develop more skills,
this
is
also
the occasion to have
rest
Suggestion
a rest
. Our choice will depend on our needs, people with a busy
day
will prefer to sleep wherease an other will do activities
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