Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Governments of all over the
world
have an idea to increase their economics and
also
thought to make it as a primary goal. Whenever we have an idea there always some people who have a different idea.
Likewise
, For their country few people to show equal importance in some other types of progress.
Instead
of sticking to the one thought, we can see these two ideas and have a detailed view of
this
essay. Nowadays,
world
countries are fighting to improve their economic
status
because of the economic variance between their
neighbor
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbour
nations. Even though they are a well-developed nation, These developed countries want to sustain their position which had a strong wealth and economic background. If we come to a developing nation
who
objective case of "who" ("who" is also often used in the objective)
whom
fighting to come to a wealthy
nation
Suggestion
nation's
position, they want to improvise their economic
status which
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status, which
to be the main goal for their budget plan in their administrations.
For example
, In India, The finance minister had come up with many schemes to heighten the self-employment and
also
helps to start the new business.
Likewise
, many developing countries were fixed their main goal as to
enhances
Suggestion
enhance
their economic
status
. On contrary to the above discussion, Few Administrators have other areas to progress in their country all with their expert's opinion along with their people's needy things.
Although
these nations focus on some other areas like poverty, famine, the basic needs of people,
etc which
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etc., which
etc. which
can heighten the people's life along with their economic
status
. Their primary goal is not to participate in the
world's
Suggestion
world
economic
war but
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war, but
they had another thing to concentrate on which
fulfills
put in effect
fulfils
their people's daily needs. Countries like Africa had many important problems that their government needs to work like food, water, education,
etc which
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etc., which
etc. which
led them to go on with the solution to solve these things.
On
Suggestion
In
concluding
this
, Some countries fighting with other countries to achieve a top position among the
world
countries to show their power and
status
.
On the other hand
, Few countries trying to
fullfill
put in effect
fulfil
their people daily needs.

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