The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
The pie charts illustrate the
water
percentage used in six regions of the world for various objectives like Industrial, Agricultural and Domestic
use
.
Overall
, in Africa, Central and South East
Asia
and South
America
, the
water
consumption is more for agriculture,
while
North
America
and Europe utilize the highest percentage of
water
for
the
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Industrial
use
. In South
America
, the
percent
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of
water
used for agriculture was 71%,
while
North
America
and Europe utilized 39% and 32% in agriculture.
However
, the usage of
water
for domestic
uses
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was less than 20% in all
the
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three countries.
Moreover
, for industrial
use
the
water
used was more in North
America
and Europe with 48% and 53% each,
while
in South
America
it is only 10%.
On the other hand
, the
water
utilization in Africa, Central and South East
Asia
is more than 80%,
while
less than 10% of
water
is put to
use
for domestic purposes in these three places.
Finally
, in
South east
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Asia
, 12% of
water
is utilized for industrial uses,
while
in Africa and Central
Asia
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only 7% and 5% of
water
is
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put to
use
for industrial purposes.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, asia, america with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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