the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The tables shows the percentage in each category of exports in 2016 compared to 2015

the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The tables shows the percentage in each category of exports in 2016 compared to 2015
The bar chart illustrates the export
earnings
of a country through numerous groups between 2015 and 2016 in
billion
dollars respectively. The table represents the change in percentage per category of exports in 2016
contrast
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to 2015.
Overall
, the petroleum
products
, export
earning
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was
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the highest and the lowest
earnings
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in the transport of textiles for both
the
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years. The export of
the
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petroleum
products
was $60
billion
initially
, which
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increased by $3
billion
in 2016. The Engineering goods transport
earnings
were around $55
billion
in 2015 and it recorded a rapid increase crossing $60
billion
in 2016.
However
, the marketing of gems and Jewellery was around $41
billion
in 2015 which has dropped to nearly $40
billion
.
However
,
the
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agricultural
products
experienced
a
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similar market
earnings
in both
the
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years.
Whereas
,
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the textiles
selling
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overseas
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about $25
billion
in 2015 and it has crossed $30
billion
eventually.
On the other hand
, the difference of percentages in data between 2016 and 2015 in petroleum
products
was 3% and engineering goods was 8% increase than 2015.
However
, a drop of 5.18%
were
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experienced in
selling
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of
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gems and Jewellery.
Finally
,
the
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agricultural and
the
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textile marketing
was
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0.81% and 15.24%, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words earnings, billion, products with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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