Children are becoming more independent and transforming the term ‘childish’. Adults can learn from their mindset. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this argument.

Although
day
by
Suggestion
with
day kids have more freedom, the word ‘childish’ is still used as a negative qualifying. Children try to change
this
settled pattern by showing how adults can improve from their limitless mentality. It is widely believed by adults that boys and girls are unconscious and irresponsible.
However
, it would be interesting if they
also
think about some positive qualities of children,
such
as their incredible creativity and impressive originality. It seems to me that not underestimating them would be beneficial for both the middle-aged and the under-aged. On the one hand, it is strongly believed that children are immature by nature and they have not the sense of responsibility and awareness. In some manners
this
could be true because they need a life guide in order to grow up properly and fully.
Furthermore
, minors can not be responsible of themselves and need adults to take care of them, though some people badly confuse
this
with
overprotection
.
For example
, think about arranging a medical visit when your kid is sick. Would you leave
this
task to them if they feel bad and require the auscultation of a doctor? It is probably difficult to set where is the thin line between responsibility and irresponsibility.
On the other hand
, the incredible potential that children have is an endless source of creativity and uniqueness. Little kids dream, are optimistic and don’t think about reliabilities and restrictions. The form in which they act doesn’t have space for limitations and,
therefore
, they reach astonishing goals.
Conversely
, adults believe that practicalities should prevail in the real world and
this
is the reason why they often remain stuck and frustrated.
For instance
, in the process of designing a new product in a well-known company, if the designers don’t open their minds, as kids do, they will never reach to develop an original and unique product which will differentiate them from the competition and will provide large amounts of profit. In conclusion, regarding children’s independence, neither all is positive nor everything is negative. Dozens of things can be learned from kids and their attitude towards fears and problems.
Grown-ups
Suggestion
Grownups
Grownup's
Grownups'
usually feel the society restriction and
thus
surprising achievements do not come up. By only changing adults’ mentality and the form they see the world, I strongly believe plenty of advances would be made to all.
Submitted by uri_9_15 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Read more in the eBook

The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »

* free ebook for Premium users

What to do next:
Look at other essays: