Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Internet shopping has become excessively demanding these days.
This
essay will discuss how online shopping is advantageous
then
its drawbacks. The two major advantages of shopping through internet are, it is very convenient and it benefits customers with w
ide range
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a wide range
of offers.
Firstly
, buying goods online has enabled users to access v
ariety
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a variety
of products that are not attainable in their locality, or buyers cannot reach supermarkets due lack of transportation. O
nline market
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The online market
has eased
such
problems by making things available at their doorstep just on a single click.
For instance
, people living in remote areas of Bangladesh often find it difficult to travel to city for g
roceries but
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groceries, but
due to availability of mobile data it has become very easy for villagers to get items they want.
Additionally
, the business owners use different tactics to make their company famous by allowing discounts, seasonal offers, e
tc,
continuing in the same way
etc.
which ultimately benefits the customers to enjoy r
eduction
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a reduction
in price. One famous clothing website, ‘Shein’ allows 30% discount for new shoppers and 5% more on referring it to a friend, it
also
enables the users to enjoy free shipping over spent of AED 150.
However
, there are slight drawbacks like buyers often get tricked when shopping online, plus there are many hidden charges included. Since online shopping does not involve checking the product by touching it, many sly sellers often trick their consumers by selling the defective products. An example from my personal experience, when I got my new phone it worked for few months and it stopped working. The sellers’ could not fix it which ultimately resulted in losing my precious data and files.
Secondly
, there are many extra charges that burdens the customers, like cash on delivery cost, tax, shipping charges, etc. But all problems can be solved if government i
nstall
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installs
strict rules and constant surveillance on trade practises.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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