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The charts show survey results concerning why MBA graduates did their degree, and employer's reasons for hiring them. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show survey results concerning why MBA graduates did their degree, and employer's reasons for hiring them. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts above summarize the results of a survey conducted
amid
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MBA
 graduates and employers. The firsts were asked to explain the reasons for doing an
MBA
, the seconds indicated the skills that they value most.
While
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65% of the graduates chose to do an
MBA
 to have better options
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 the labour market, only 10% of the employers recognize the
values
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 of qualifications.
According to
 the survey, 50% of the employers were equally divided in thinking that
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personality and
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knowledge
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value
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 most in the workplace,
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20% gained importance to the employee's presentation, followed
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 who underlined the importance of previous experiences; as mentioned, only one in ten of the interviewees valued most the qualifications.
On the other hand
,
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65% of the graduates think that the reason to choose an
MBA
are
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 the better job opportunities granted by
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 qualification, the remaining 35% was divided by
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15% who thought that an
MBA
 could give a better ability to do the job; a 12% who pointed out the personal development as the main reason to choose the course and only 8% of the former students said that the best reason to take an
MBA
 is the ability to help others.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words mba with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "divided" was used 2 times.
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