More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

Animals are an integrating part of the ecosystem that we live in. Without the animals whole ecosystem and the food cycle will break and we will have famines and a mass extinction. But in the recent years more and more species are getting extinct at an alarming rate. While evolution is always a reason there are
manmade
not of natural origin; prepared or made artificially
man-made
reasons
also
, namely two, mainly global warming and merciless killing.
First
, let us look at global warming. We all know global warming is the most significant threat to mother nature as emission of various
green house
a building with glass walls and roof; for the cultivation and exhibition of plants under controlled conditions
greenhouse
gases are making
this
planet more hotter and
unhabitable
fit for habitation
inhabitable
to many species of animals.
As a
result many
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result, many
animals are dying and simply getting extinct
.
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.
Another
manmade
not of natural origin; prepared or made artificially
man-made
cause is merciless killing. Extinction due to
this
process has always been around for years, as in
this
way
dodo
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do do
to do
got
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get
extinct. But these days people with their
guns killing
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guns, killing
more animals
such
as
whale
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whales
or tigers because of the rush and to sell these
animals
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animal
animal's
animals'
body
part
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parts
at a high price.
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