Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

#people #exercise #time #health

Many working people don't have enough time to exercise. They usually don't have a car and have to go to

work

by a taxi or bus or train and so on.

Also

, their office may be far from their

home

. So if they want to arrive their

work

in time, they will have to wake up early in the morning. They usually

work

over time and when they come back

home

, they are very tired.

For example

, I

work

9 hours in a day and I get stuck in traffic when I want to come back

home

. When I arrive

home

, I like to take a shower and rest. I think of preventing from health problems, we should do a simple exercise between daily activities in 5 up to 10 minutes and devote a few hours to sport in holidays.

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Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Nowadays governments are investing more in public transport such as buses and trains rather than in building new roads.What are the reasons for this?Is this a positive or negative development?