Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

Many working people don't have enough time to exercise. They usually don't have a car and have to go to
work
by a taxi or bus or train and so on.
Also
, their office may be far from their
home
. So if they want to arrive their
work
in time, they will have to wake up early in the morning. They usually
work
over time and when they come back
home
, they are very tired.
For example
, I
work
9 hours in a day and I get stuck in traffic  when I want to come back
home
. When I arrive
home
, I like to take a shower and rest. I think of preventing from health problems, we should do a simple exercise between daily activities in 5 up to 10 minutes and devote a few hours to sport in holidays.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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